Thursday, March 18, 2010

Real World Parallelism example

STUDENT LOAN MODIFICATION PROGRAM

Student Loan Modification Program Can Help You Reduce Your Student Loan Cost.
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STUDENT LOAN MODIFICATION PROGRAM

Student Loan Modification Program Can Help You Reduce Your Student Loan Cost.
We Can Help You With Your Student Loan Modification Today.

  • Reduce your Interest Rate on your Student Loan

  • Extend the Terms of Your Student Loan

  • Having the Terms of Your Student Loan Modified



    Although the Parallelism for the add itself is correct, the listing beneath the add is not parallel. The bulleted information fails in being parallel because of the tenses of the opening words. They should all either end in "ing" as in "having" in the last bullet, or the final bullet should read as "Have the Terms of Your Student Loan Modified".

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